Tuesday, November 2, 2010

Second draft




                               Essay on television
             Television is considered one of the most popular inventions of the twentieth century. Television becomes a changeable tool of person life. It is a widely used and highly accepted device that is found in most homes today. Now we can't imagine our life without television. There is a great variety of opinions about television: some say that it’s very useful, and the others that it’s harmful.
                      On one hand there are various and valuable programs on television .Through it, we can inform with different kinds of information. There is news which informs us with every thing happen around all over the world. Then it can be a mean of adversiting, it provided us with information about new products. Besides information about weather broadcast. Also we can sea the important events life especially sports events such as football matches. Moreover there are the educational programs; through it people absorb knowledge like science, history and health care.
                         On the other hand, Television is also kind of relaxation. For instances, people can sea films or movies that can entertain them in their leisure time. Moreover watching TV is kind of activity for people who can't moving much from their home. If you are bored, you can switch on TV and sea whatever you want like comedy, drama or action. Television programming can provide entertainment for individuals and groups.
                         Apart from its advantages, however, television also brings lots of disadvantages to viewers too. For me one of these disadvantages is that the television viewers become passive in their action. The TV separates us from the real world because it isn’t giving them opportunity to communicate with each other or the outer world.Also it wastes the time because people spend all their time watching TV.As result of that, they neglect their jobs.Besides to it reduces the connection among the members of family
                         Nowadays television becomes a means of harmful especially for children. Many children become inactive in their educational life. That is because they spend most of their time watching TV and neglect their lessons and their homework. Also it has mental and physical effects on children. They face problems with their bodies such as overweight and effects on the eye- sight. Moreover it, there are a lot of programs or movies which aren’t suitable for children. Through it, children learn violence and may be try it. So I against TV.
             In conclusion television is a great invention. But as we know every invention has its advantages and its disadvantages. So we should make use of it and make restriction on watching it.

2 comments:

  1. A good draft but you need to take care of the following:

    1. a changeable tool of person (personal) life
    2.and the others (say) that it’s harmful
    3. On (the) one hand there are various an
    4. Through it, we can inform (wrong verb meaning, you can say we are provided with) with different kinds of information.
    informs us with every thing (that) happen (around) all over the world.
    5. Then it can be a mean (a means)of adversiting,
    6. Take care of tenses, be consistent, if you use present simple stick to it all over the essay, if you use past stick to it.
    7. can sea (spelling mistake) films
    8. people who can't moving (move) much from their home
    9. Television programming (programs)
    10. television also brings lots of disadvantages to viewers too.(you cant use also and too at the same sentence).
    11. Moreover watching TV is kind of activity for people who can't moving much from their home. If you (wrong structure)
    12. a means of harmful (harm) especially

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  2. nice topic ,dr samah has previously taliked about the mistakes

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